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Offline Beleth

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Vocabularyclept Competition #1
« on: February 01, 2009, 07:17:22 PM »
Introduction
A "vocabularyclept poem" is a poem which has been created by rearranging the words of an existing poem.  Oftentimes the new poem is strikingly unlike the original poem, but the shorter the poem is, the more similar the two poems will be.

The Game
Here's how this will work. I'll post the words of a poem in alphabetical order (and take out all the punctuation), and then you take those words and make a poem out of them.  You can't add words, but you can repeat words if you want to, and you can add any punctuation you wish.  It doesn't have to rhyme, since there's no guarantee the original poem rhymed.

After the number of entries starts to peter out (probably a few days), I'll add a poll to the thread and ask people to vote for their favorite.  After another 2-3 days, I'll close the poll and post the original poem.  The winner will achieve fame, glory, and knowledge that he or she is a Master Vocabularycleper.

So here goes.  This first one will be short and relatively easy.  (If you know the poem, don't just repeat it!)

a a a air and attempting
bat
convince
evening
fact feathers
hair has has
I inaudible it it it its its its
ladies lands like lives
men mouse myself
never no not not
of on
quite
rat rather
sings spend
the the their their through to
when which wings wives
yet
zigzags

I expect to pass through this world but once;
any good thing therefore that I can do, or any kindness that I can show to any fellow creature, let me do it now;
let me not defer or neglect it, for I shall not pass this way again.
-- Stephan Grellet

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Re: Vocabularyclept Competition #1
« Reply #1 on: February 01, 2009, 08:17:09 PM »
this is as far as i got...
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attempting to convince its wings of fact
a bat sings inaudible zigzags through evening air

so incredibly incomplete... i give up now.

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Re: Vocabularyclept Competition #1
« Reply #2 on: February 01, 2009, 08:50:18 PM »
(Oh boy. This is tough. Going to have to loosen grammatical rules here. So plurals and tenses aren't quite going to work. Can't really work every word in either. But lets try it. Pardon the misogyny.)

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When wives, attempting to sings,
yet has no feather, no wings,
lands inaudible on the air,
Its not a fact. Its not.
Myself? I rather the ladies spend the evening on hair;
their lives, zigzags, which never quite convince.

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Re: Vocabularyclept Competition #1
« Reply #3 on: February 01, 2009, 08:53:01 PM »
uh.....rather abstract.


a rat rather sings of its wives' wings
yet when ladies hair has evening feathers
a mouse never quite lands
their zigzags not attempting inaudible lives
men like myself convince their bat its fact

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Re: Vocabularyclept Competition #1
« Reply #4 on: February 08, 2009, 11:48:48 AM »
Okay, so this didn't catch on as well as I'd hoped :) so I'm going to bypass the voting (I thought they were all very good tries!  It's not as easy as it looks)  and just post the original poem.

The Bat
by Ogden Nash

Myself, I rather like the bat
It’s not a mouse, it’s not a rat
It has no feathers, yet it has wings
It’s quite inaudible when it sings.
It zigzags through the evening air
And never lands on ladies’ hair
A fact of which men spend their lives
Attempting to convince their wives.
I expect to pass through this world but once;
any good thing therefore that I can do, or any kindness that I can show to any fellow creature, let me do it now;
let me not defer or neglect it, for I shall not pass this way again.
-- Stephan Grellet

 

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